you guys, this is so bad and i’m going to try to explain why it’s bad, but it might take
you guys, this is so bad and i’m going to try to explain why it’s bad, but it might take a while, so bear with me. 1. wow is “I don’t think pain makes a man. I think we become men in spite of it” faux-deep as heck, directly targeted at quoteboards and the screenwriters he wants to look at it. 2. wow is “Pain makes the man” an ~edgy~, grimdark mantra for the priors to have, we get it, you’re dark and realistic b/c the ancient world was dark, man, dark 3. i don’t really care enough to find out how old Ren is but i think he’s fairly youthful & i feel like “my hero is so smart/enlightened/whatever that he’s able to throw off the mental yoke of the society he lives in at the beginning of the book” is a bad place to start4. That second sentence is completely unnecessary. 5. I’m still stuck on “I don’t think pain makes a man. I think we become men in spite of it,” it’s just so awful -- source link
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